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May 9.24: Coping, but barely

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The rickety door

 

The rickety door,

brave old thing,

ancient soldier

splintering.

Sentry faithful,

straight, alone,

pledge and promise

sealed in stone.

Arched and crowned

in Gothic grace,

no option but

to age in place.

Creaking, popping,

rust embossed,

rheumatic squeaks

in echo tossed.

Door-in-door,

casual plumb,

witness to herald,

hoof and drum.

And now, time-sanded,

gapped and grey,

in rasping crick

it seems to say,

“Admit it.

You would love to see

what’s on the

other side of me.

But I’m the keeper,

you can’t see more;

I have my secrets.

I’m the rickety door.”

 

 

With thanks to photographer Brian (“Bushboy”),

submitted to Dan Antion’s

Thursday Doors Writing Challenge.

21 thoughts on “May 9.24: Coping, but barely

  1. Judy@NewEnglandGardenAndThread's avatar

    Applause for your word skills. I really like this one, but maybe that’s because some of your words apply to how I feel some days. 🙂 Happy Thursday.

  2. lois's avatar

    This is wonderful, Maureen. What’s that?! I think the door creaked open just a tad to let you in!

  3. Murphy's Law's avatar

    Maureen, Brian’s door is awesome, but your poem makes it come alive. Fantastic job! I hate to admit it, but my rickety body can definitely relate to this rickety door. Sigh….

    Ginger🦋

    • Oddment's avatar

      Thanks, Ginger. I too felt that I understood a little of the rickety door, but I know others have more limitations than I do. I am sorry you are rickety; it gets in the way.

  4. JT Twissel's avatar

    As a fellow old rickety door with secrets – thank you for the sweet start to my day!

  5. Dan Antion's avatar

    The doors knows more than we give it credit for, Maureen. Impressive that you could see that.

    “no option but to age in place.” I resemble that line.

  6. circadianreflections's avatar

    This is lovely! I really felt you found the doors-(s) voice.

  7. Teagan Riordain Geneviene's avatar

    Well done, Maureen! I enjoyed this a lot. Hugs.

  8. Brenda's Thoughts's avatar

    “Creaking … rheumatic squeaks” sounds familiar. Haha. You weave your words so creatively!

  9. marianallen's avatar

    Beautifully done! I think you did a great job of implying human aging while making the poem unquestionably about the door. That’s a slick trick to pull off, and you made it seem effortless.

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